re: [Return of Legends] Book One: Prophecy's Curse 8/8

[Jim_D_Means@xxxxxxxxxxx]

YEEEE-HAW!

Much happy-dancing done at my home when I found this story on my server. I decided to re-read the whole magilla before giving my feedback.

Dynamite stuff my friend. I am intrigued how you're developing both Buffy and Willow's growing abilities, and the various relationships and individual characters as well(and I see you jumped on the Giles/Joyce bandwagon). And the welcome return of Brigit and Morrigan. Part two is gonna be epic!

I have one error to report, however. In this story, you indicated that Spike first arrived in your timeline sometime after Buffy and Willow's wedding. But in the very first story in this series, "A Higher Power", when Buffy was delirious and imagined all of her enemies attacking her and Willow, Spike was one of the enemies she named. I know, it's nit-picky, but your attention to details has been so right on the money before, this kinda stuck out for me.

Still, if you've only committed one continuity error in such a grand undertaking as this, hey, you're way ahead of the curve. Give yourself a pat on the back, then get back to writing the next part. We await with bated breath.

Kirayoshi

"The path of the righteous man is beset on all sides by the inequities of the selfish and the tyranny of evil men. Blessed is he who, in the name of charity and good will, shepherds the weak through the valley of darkness, for he is truly his brother's keeper and the finder of lost children. And I will strike down upon thee with great vengeance and furious anger those who attempt to poison and destroy my brothers. And you will know my name is the Lord when I lay my vengeance upon you."
--Samuel L. Jackson(Jules Winnfield), misquoting Ezekiel 25:17,
"Pulp Fiction"




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