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Right off the top of my head I can't see much that needs improvement,
except maybe to use more characters, but that's storywise, not writing.
Your style, grammer, and vocabualry are all excellent. I may have missed
somehting, but I don't know what. Just keep up the good work, and
everything should be fine.
Steven
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Date: 17 avril, 2001
14:44:05
Subject: Re: Re:
::BuffyLovesWillow:: Aftershocks (1/?)
This is excelent, and I maen that. I do hope for the
BuffyWantsWillow
parts, cause I'm "a sick, kinky, perverted, jerk"
(Note: Quote from
an Ex of mine, who didn't like some of the things I
suggested. She
was a B*tch anyway.) Anyway love the story, it's all
angsty, and
that's a great emotion to write. Have fun writing, and
keep up the
good work.
Hehe, aren't we all? Thanks forthe
kind comments, they're much
appreciated. Angst is a fun emotion to
write if you're in the mood
for it, and I'm in the mood for no reason
it seems :) Oh well...
How do you think I could improve on it - in
your opinion I mean? I
can only get better if I understand my flaws,
or something like that
^_^
~Alyson
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