Re: Welcome to My Nightmare - 3/7 - B/W/T - PG13

[Kris <krismpy@xxxxxxxxx>]

Hi,

I really enjoyed this chapter. At first I thought I
wouldn't being it looked like it was a simple
"vacation" piece. Vacation fics are fine for me once
in a while, but wasn't what I was looking for when I
started this part. However, you managed to come up
with some good things during their trip that kept the
story interesting. Nice job.

A couple of your sentences were run-ons, but weren't
too distracting from the overall content.

Now, about where you left off...I sure hope you post
the next part real soon.

Kris


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