[buffywantswillow] Delicate Cruelty feedback

["Lee, The Chicken Slayer" <cq585@xxxxxxxxxxx>]

Erin *R00LZ!!!* Delicate Cruelty is fantastic! Now I see why Alan loves
you so much. Redemption and The Faith Factor were both excellent, but this
latest effort is just Awesome!



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The dismissal of all her charges, combined with the hint of PTB and you know
Faith's problems are just beginning.

And I love Trin and the Father. I am encoding chapter 5 now, I can't wait
to read it tonight!


I don't know if you take Random Suggestions, but I thought of a possible
reimplementation for something:

--> As Willow appeared to be well on her way to another nervous babble,
Giles cut her off. "Please, do go back to, uh, to whatever it was I wasn't
interrupting." he said, hanging up the phone, and then breaking a small grin
in spite of himself. <--

This may better capture the flavour oif what I think you were trying to
accomplish at that part.



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Kudos, and keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to the rest of this
one.

Cheers! :-)


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