Feedback:: Slayer Forever 1/?

[cilia@xxxxx]

I'm Honest Cilia,
Yes I'm back and the format will be:
1. Story 
2. Scenes
3. Characters and relationship

Feedback on Slayer Forever (1) by Steven Williams

The story concept is good, although slightly used, but with an 
interesting new twist in which sense both Willow and Elisabeth are 
immortal. Also the general swiftness of the development of the B/W 
relationship is something I thought was very cleverly done.


The scene that stuck in my mind, was Tara's death, but it was a 
little on the short side and it could have been drawn out a bit more, 
although that is being short in now way lessens the quality of the 
story telling. The fast-forward although, not a plot device I like to 
see used too much, works well here. Onto the final scene, good, but 
could have been done with a little more build up to Amanda showing 
herself.

The characters come of quite nicely; Willow showing her emotions and 
Buffy sticking to her principles even in the face of Willow's 
willingness. The relationship between Buffy and Willow is tastefully 
dealt with, hopefully clearing the way for more action then kisses in 
upcoming chapters.

And that's all,
Cilia