Re: Digest Number 574 :: Feeedback :: (Fool) On The Hill

["C S Armitage" <soren_nyrond@xxxxxxxxxxx>]

Feedback as (supposely) we're supposed to proffer.

Item :: This has the potential to *rock*.

For myself, I'd have edited it slightly differently -- as a "speaker" of
what purports to be "English", I'd have liked to punctuate some of it. And
there's an 'of' that feels like it should be a 'have'.
But that, in my book, is what you do when you've decided the story-line
merits continuation. This is the uncut jewel straight from the mineface.
It needs *polishing*.

So, the question is, is this worht more ?
Unequivcally *yes* -- it cries out for more, net least because, for once of
a BtVS/X-Files x-over, they're coming to look at the monster not the Slayer.
Which is what Mulder does (in my book). The B/W interplay :
> "You need sleep," Willow stresses. "And I'd feel much better, knowing
that
> you're getting some," Willow stops and her eyes widen. "Sleep I mean,
> getting some sleep, cause sleep is good for you and." her babbling is cut
of
is well up to screen standard (why am I not surprised, you're Cilia) and the
mysterious Engloishman will undoubtedly prove an essential pivot-point
between the two worlds (even if it turns out to be Ethan).

So, please continue in due course -- perhaps please polish part one when you
do -- and I (sort of) promise not to post repeated pleas for part two till
it's obvoiopus that you're torturing us by witholding it.

Back-fed; lurking once more

Soren