Re: FIC: Straight Through the Heart [7/?]

[Mad-Hamlet@xxxxxxx]

Greetings,
I gotta say.
This is a good damn story.
The dialogue is spot on. It's your strongest point in fact. 
A great blend of seriousness with the odd out comment that emphasies 
nicely who is speaking and echoes truly with 'who' they are.
The story itself is also quite good. A very involved, thought out, and 
worthwile 'Realization' effect between two people.
Not a five page munchy but a damn good story instead.
The only thing I'd like to see more of is small details.
Facial expressions when someone is speaking. Hand gestures, movements. 
Pacing even. 
And that's just a small thing.
This one's a keeper.
I intend to keep it.
So.
You keep writing and I'll keep..eh..keeping.
I remain, as always,
Mad-Hamlet