Re: FIC: Straight Through the Heart [8/?]

[Mad-Hamlet@xxxxxxx]

Greetings,
Okay, let's break this down.
No..
On second thought let's not. It stands up rightly so goodly as is.
The right touches, the right sayings. I'm trying to be abiviant here. 
Damn but that's hard. 

Okay. 

Highlights.
Well, they worked it out. That's a big 'PLUS ONE' in my book. Check.
The parts making up the whole which ended up being greater.
My personal favorite? The mirror. It's those little things that really 
give a tale it's bite, or caress, or whatever you want it to do to the 
reader. 
In this case, I believe, you wanted to remind of what was, what is, 
AND what was human. The mirror is very human. Er..that is the 
behaivore of Willow before the mirror was human. Mirrors are merely 
compressed and heated sand with a highly reflective surface. But you 
knew that already didn't you.
Moving on.

Expressions. Actions. All there. Goodly done too.
Buffy's highlight was the walk back across the room from the door to 
Willow's side. Longest, shortest steps. Kinda reminded me of Zeno the 
Eclectic(WHO I LOATHE!)Y'know..the philospher who said if you go half 
the distance between you and your goal, then half again, half 
again..ad infinitum you'll always be moving toward your goal but never 
reach it.
Well Buffy reached it so UP YOURS ZENO!
My..that was cathartic.

All in all you got a good work done here. 
So I'll keep this one too.
Yes I'm a proffesional Keeper. No, not that black slug thing from 
Babylon 5, WHY DO YOU PEOPLE KEEP EXPECTING THE WORST FROM ME?!?

*Sigh*

Let's see what ya got else in that bag O'yummies there eh?

I remain, as always,
Mad-Hamlet