Re: FF: Willow Chronicles: Stalking Death: Chapter One

[Kris <krismpy@xxxxxxxxx>]

Hi,

I just sent a little bit of feedback on this
story to the list, but thought I'd send the typos
I noticed to you personally. I wasn't really
looking for typos when I was reading, so I don't
know how complete this rundown is, but I thought
it might save you a little bit of trouble at
least.

Once again, I always love seeing fics from you on
the list. :)

Kris

> <><><><><><><> 
>Instead of the dark tainting energy,
> she was 
> learning the white and gray magic. How to use
> it. What the different magic types where. 

Typo - where should be were

> <><><><><><><> 
> 
> Judy Trumen threw the last of her lovers
> clothes into the hallway. She was sick and
> tired of 
> coming in second in Jaime's life, and she'd be
> damned if she'd take it anymore. She was her 
> lover not that red haired addict. She was her
> best friend not some selfish witch that
> couldn't 
> even take care of herself much less anyone
> else. 
>
Typo - lovers should have an apostrophe in it

Also, there should be a comma before the word
'not' (both times) and before the word 'much' in
the last sentence.

> " Damn it, Judy. I swear to you, nothing is
> going on between me and Will." Jaime grabbed 
> her arms desperately. " She just meet her
> familiar, they're probably making love at this
> very 
> moment." 

Typo - meet should be met

> <><><><><><><> 

> She nodded, letting go of an guilt she
> might've had. This happened because it was
> meant too, 

Typo - an should be any


>Well she's a Druid, actually
> she's more like a Druid Wiccan Witch type 
> person, and she specializes in teaching
> recovering addict's and the Goddess sent Alex
> to me as 
> my familiar, but we only meet last night at the
> football game. 

Typo - meet should be met

> <><><><><><><> 

> " Buffy." Willow slide around her, " I
> already told you that she's my familiar, o-or
> pet." 

Typo - slide should be slid


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"People who don't read cheat themselves. By not reading, they limit what they can achieve, make mistakes they could avoid, and miss opportunities that could improve their lives. Finally, as the gaps in their knowledge become apparent, they must reconcile themselves to not being taken seriously."

~Morton Blackwell

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