Re: :short fic

[danspector@xxxxxxxxx]

Brittanny (or is it Paula?),

Whoa! Stream-of-consciousness much? I'm glad you contributed your
work, but it IS okay to pause and put in the quotation marks and break
it into paragraphs and such. This makes it much easier for us to read.

(Also, you should have a proper subject line and header, like you see on
other fics. Remember, if you need help with this, there are many people
who would be willing to act as betareaders to assist you.)

I did like it, though, when Xander sees VampWillow's leather outfit and
barely blinks. I guess now that B/W are out of the closet, he's had a
lot of ideas about them, and VW's get-up fits right in with that.
Naughty Xander! :)

Thanks again,

Dan