--- In buffywantswillow@y..., jeepy91@a... wrote:
Hey guys, here's part 2. Thanks for the feedback :) And for those having trouble with the formatting, here's the FF.Net link: http://fanfiction.net/read.php? storyid=682956&chapter=2
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?Huh? Uh no, no breaking, I?m ok, not broken in the least bit. Surprised definitely, but not broken.? Willow manages to babble out enough to assure me that she indeed is still capable of speech. But that still doesn?t help me figure out how bad her reaction to my dirty little secret is going to be.
And you say you don't have the mannerisms down? I think if that's not down pat, then it's certainly good enough for me! I can definitely see Willow stunned to uncharacteristic silence by Buffy's reveal.
And again you write the story as if it's actually you, the first person feel you achieve is wonderful, I love when authors can pull that off believably. You get inside the characters' heads and it brings out the feelings and sensations they are experiencing.
And I bet Willow definitely does pick up on the guilty angst that Buffy is almost making the confession that she feels she is cheating on her, anyone as close as those two probably would.
LOL! The clone of the sex bot ... classic line and it definitely had me chuckling, I could really see Buffy berating herself for it.
And who could ever forgo a hug with the Willster ... certainly I know I'd never wash the bodyparts that received THAT embrace!
Please ... any more?? Don't make us wait. Another nice part of a very sweet story Cas, well done.
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