Re: FIC; Life; Version 2.0

["blinviz" <debvii@xxxxxxxxx>]

--- In buffywantswillow@y..., JDMeans@a... wrote:

> That's the tone I'm going for in this story. How Willow's efforts to change 
> things will have ripple effects, changing things that no one could have 
> forseen, and not necessarily for the better. Hopefully I'll blindside you 
> with some of the changes I have in store for you. Some you may love, some I 
> guarantee you'll hate, but hopefully they'll make sense in the context of the 
> story.

This story is rockin! I could see ripples in the whole Snyder-letter 
thing and Jonathan running into Willow (which REALLY surprised me and 
immediately got me to thinking about Earshot). Oh, yeah, and there's 
the "I love you", of course.

I teared up during Willow's grief over lost innocence, laughed at 
Xander's attempt to capitalise (seemed VERY Xander, somehow), and I 
really liked the touch of Oz noticing that Willow's not exactly the 
same as she was yesterday. However, I was a bit confused about Will's 
face being physically older, seeing as she's got S2 hair. I could 
understand her *expressions* being "different somehow", but either BOTH 
her hair and body are S6, or neither are.

POV nit. How would Willow know about Angelus reading the inscription? 
(Technically, Angelus never needed an invite into the school -- a 
public building -- anyway. I've always fanwanked his reply to Jenny as 
a bit of vampire sardonicism.)

Great stuff!