Re: FIC: The Spaces Inbetween (3/?)

[danspector@xxxxxxxxx]

[side note--you needed to credit the song. Both for legal reasons, and
because I have absolutely no idea what song it was.]

RW,

Oh, I like your Buffy-voice here. The little editorial comments: "Ah,
my life...never a dull moment", "some time in the near future, I really
needed to work on my reflexes", "if I had a normal life I would not have
to experience so many very weird and disturbing things" are all quite in
character. And little phrases like "mentally staking myself" and "All
thoughts must focus on Willow" added depth to the narrative.

(I must say, that while I didn't mind the first plug for "Tales of the
Slayer", repeating in makes it sound like you're on ME's payroll. In
which case, I've got a few things to say to you...)

The Spike scene was extremely squicky, and once again made me angry at
the arc this year. Just like in this fic, Spike now no longer has any
reason to believe Buffy's denials; he's no longer crazy and obsessed,
but responding to "desires" and "feelings" on Buffy's part that she
never had before, but got dragged into the canon as a sop to the
Spuffys.  

(Since the whole point of the story was that she was using him
**precisely because** she didn't care about him--which is why she
didn't choose, say, Xander, for her sex poodle--it makes precious
little sense for her to suddenly discover that she does care about
Spikey-wikey, but of course ME values laying the groundwork for Season 7
and Spuffy4Eva! over staying consistent with the story they were telling
this year. **sigh**)

Now, Spike "assumes", and who can blame him? Buffy has been reduced to
this empty bag of denial, who squeaks and squawks and then gives in and
fucks him and laughs at his oh-so-hilarious tales of murdering people.
Grr. I guess your scene was very effective, because it made me as angry
as the show itself did. And at least Buffy did stop, this time...

Tara, what can I say? How about "slut!"? Or maybe "SLUT!!!"? Hitting
on your ex's housemate and best friend, that's classy. Particularly
with said ex at home. Wonder what she would have said if Willow
answered the door? "Oh, hi, Will. I brought Buffy this CD because I
thought I might try to get in her panties for a change; is she home?"

Hmm, I know this was originally tagged as a B/W/T, but right now I'm
wishing that, since it's a B/W conflict you've got going, you just have
B/W resolve it. (Of course, I'm not Tara's biggest fan on her best day,
so I'm probably prejudiced.)

Oh, and about that conflict: I loved how you had Buffy talk about
taking the stairs two at a time, yet when it actually came time to climb
them, "each step is like a mountain". Yep, our resolve is always strong
until we have to act on it; why do you think Buffy chose to answer the
door, anyway?

But at least she did go upstairs, and did try...and promptly got shot
down. Well, better luck in chapter 4. They have to resolve this
eventually, right? (Wasn't I saying that about the eps this year,
though? **sigh**)

More, please! (See, I can say that, now that I'm caught up <g>)

Dan

the sigh-master