Re: Fic: The Willow and Buffy Song 4/?

["japmap" <japmap@xxxxxxxxx>]

Great story! Vivid imagery, great use of music/Will performing music 
for flow; strong tension and well paced. Scene with Buffy falling 
to the floor sobbing...well, I had to get the kleenex. Willow seems a 
little cold, especially walking away from Buffy's pain; the contrast 
with Oz's comfort also makes me wonder how Willow can love Buffy if 
she didn't feel that kind of compassion. Or 
maybe she's just in denial? I think maybe we need more of Willow's 
internal dialog in reaction to Buffy's kiss, etc., because her 
inkling that something's different because she felt "fire" from their 
kiss seemed more like kind of a selfish momentary reflection than a 
spark of recognition of true love. Although Willow was contemplating 
some of this after Oz's comfort, it just seems to be off. Maybe I 
expected her to suddenly feel awful about leaving Buffy in that state?
Well,I hope that makes sense. 


Can't wait for more!
Regards,
Japmap