Re: Joining of Soul and Demon 1/??

[danspector@xxxxxxxxx]

Welcome, Claire!  Always glad to see new authors at work :)

As for the fic itself:

Personally, I'm really not much for either bondage or the dating of
ensouled vampires.  But...

....you do a very nice job of showing the extraordinary circumstances
that make the bondage an act of trust (a standard claim in bondage fics
but one I've never believed so much as I do here) and...

....you did a nicely specific description of how and why this VampWillow
is worthy of Buffy's acceptance (even if I still think this sort of
thing would make Buffy run for the hills, given her experience with
Angel, and that any vampire who really had Willow's soul would be
severely depressed that she couldn't go to school any more <g>).

Fine work for a first fic.

As for the non-betaing, the only really noticeable thing is the fact
that fic starts out in third person (in the Willow-centric section) and
then the part where we're privy to Buffy's thoughts also starts out in
third person but then suddenly slips into first.  Otherwise, A-okay.

More would seem appropriate, no?

Dan


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