I liked it.
It was nice and very sexy.
The only thing that I thought might improve it is if you added just a bit at the beginning of Willow’s POV to explain that her continued sorrow since the leaving of Oz was more closely tied to a renewal of her desire for the Slayer and realization that she couldn’t have her. You make reference to it with her lament over Buffy’s choice in meat, but it could be more clearly spelled out. As it is, there is a slightly jarring aspect to the thought that she’s been a complete emotional wreck for an entire month at Oz’s departure, but she’s instantly ready for naked-snuggles with Buffy?
As I said, I liked it, I’m just responding to your feedback request.
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From: Botophobic
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Subject: ~Buffy*Wants*Willow~ Fic:
The Wiccan and Slayer (1/1) **NC-17**
TITLE:The Wiccan and Slayer
NAME:Bot_ophobic
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RATING: NC-17
SPOILERS: Fourth Season
PAIRING:B/W
SUMMARY:After Oz leaves, the Slayer decides to cheer up Willow.
DISCLAIMER: I don't own them.
ARCHIVING/DISTRIBUTION: Just ask.
FEEDBACK: This is the first NC-17 I've ever written, be kind but if you have suggestions to make it better let me know.
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