Hi Dutch
Thanks for your review on my first chapter. Yeah...I have lots of problems with the past tense,present tense and so forth. =( I sometimes get pretty confused too!
About a beta reader, I do have a beta reader. His name is Mike...ermm he wrote "Shattered Trust" (Buffy/Tara) and it was amazing. He's an amazing beta reader too and helps me alot on my story. =)
Hopefully the next chapter will be interesting too. Thanks again! =)
Sincerely,
desdemona
Dutch <dutchpizza@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
I like the story being told and that Willow doesn't just decide that night to leave Oz. That doesn't happen very often so it's a nifty thing. And I love a slow build up in a fic and that looks to be what you're going for. So, while waiting for more, I thought I'd also mention that you change between present tense, past tense, and future tense all through paragraphs and even some sentences get 2 different tenses. So, get those all fixed up and it's off to a great start; oh, and I read your reply to Dan, that English isn't your main language, so a beta reader or something like that could help out a lot probably.
Hope you didn't mind me pointing that out,
Dutch