Reviews for The Goddess & the Vampire
| DawnBTVS |
harleyquinnmark@yahoo.com |
2006-01-30 |
id # 2466 |
| Interesting (and fairly unique) start. I hope to see a bit more backstory in future additions (the creation of this terrorist war/creation of the factions, how Willow & Lilth met, what caused B/W to break apart, etc.). Keep it going. |
| bad shot |
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2006-01-30 |
id # 2467 |
| great start can't wait to see how you go on with this. |
| Sousa |
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2006-01-30 |
id # 2468 |
| Looks very interesting,something I would read,but you might want to look around for an editor. |
| KieranMc |
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2006-01-30 |
id # 2471 |
| Like nothing I've ever read before. I'm interested in the backstory, details on the war, Willow's partner, & what happened between B & W. Interesting start, Maybe a beta reader would be of help to you.The Wererats are intriguing me still. Look forward to the next part. - KMc |
| drea |
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2006-01-31 |
id # 2475 |
| i always like to encourage a potentially good writer....(that would be you)........great start.....good imagination.....you have caught my interests....and anxiously await more........thanks for your contribution! |
| blazer001 |
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2006-01-31 |
id # 2476 |
| Look good for just starting I do hope to see more of it. |
| Bad shot |
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2006-02-01 |
id # 2483 |
| Get more out soon but you really need a Beta. i could help if you need me to, but the mistakes get annoying when you read it. |
| drea |
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2006-02-01 |
id # 2484 |
| this is a cool story.....its very promising, but please get a beta reader......you lost me in a couple of places b/c i couldn't figure out what you were trying to say....but....i love it and can't wait for more!!!!!!!! |
| Sousa |
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2006-02-01 |
id # 2485 |
| Um,I'm very confused.You came from ok to weird,with all the year jumping and no background info.Really re-read the stuff you write,it might help. |
| acs |
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2006-02-01 |
id # 2486 |
Okay... lots of points for an original idea. The core idea is sound.
Unfortunately, you need some serious help with the writing itself. This is very hard to read. Almost impossible to follow. I would suggest you find someone to help, a beta with experience with grammar and writing. |
| Rin |
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2006-02-04 |
id # 2511 |
| Interesting... |
| Sousa |
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2006-02-05 |
id # 2515 |
| Quite short,but looking up. |
| blazer001 |
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2006-02-07 |
id # 2524 |
| Must see more. Well this seem to be getting off to a good start. The only really thing I have against it is that the chapter are so small. |
| Rin |
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2006-02-07 |
id # 2529 |
| We're gonna get to see Buffy soon?? =) |
| bad shot |
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2006-02-08 |
id # 2537 |
| great chapter. really starting to come along a lot of the spelling mistakes are gone, and the building up of tension is coming along nicely. |
| Sousa |
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2006-02-26 |
id # 2721 |
| When is there going to be Wiffy scenes?I can't wait to see them together. |
| K |
none@supplied.com |
2006-03-03 |
id # 2752 |
| There is some potential with this story, it's just physically demanding to read. I recommend trying a spellchecker before posting, or have someone proof read. English may not be your first language, but it is mangled pretty badly. Still, as I said there IS some potential for this story if you clean it up a bit. I'm looking forward to reading the following chapters. |
| Sousa |
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2006-03-03 |
id # 2753 |
| I'm gonna say I'm starting to get bored,there's no info.,really no backstory,and where's the Wiffy!?You probably don't even read these reviews... |
| Sousa |
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2006-03-19 |
id # 2961 |
| Are they finally going to see each other!? |
| Ema |
bond_chick2003@yahoo.co.uk |
2006-03-26 |
id # 3037 |
| it's the first time i've read this fic and i like it alot and would like to read more as it is very interesting, as buffy has the powers of dracular can she change into bats and a wolf, update soon |
| Sousa |
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2006-03-30 |
id # 3061 |
| FINALLY!That took forever.Maybe now the story can get really interesting. |
| ema |
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2006-03-31 |
id # 3063 |
| thanks for the update, it was short but still good update soon, please don't leave us hanging |
| Bids |
cbubblesbids@yahoo.com |
2006-04-02 |
id # 3074 |
Hi Wolf,
I've been reading your story with some interest and wanted to say thanks for sharing. I applaud your effort to write in a second language and feel for the most part you write very well. Your dialoge is believable, your story intriguing and fresh. It has a very real feel in the sense of the politics and what's going on in the world around that a lot of stories that swerve from canon don't have and I look forward to seeing how it plays out in the future. However, I think you might do well to have someone proof your work before you submit (i.e. a beta reader) just to catch things like spelling errors, grammatical mistakes and capitalization. Just a quick note on capitalization, I notice that you capitalize many words that should not be. I wonder if it's some sort of problem with how your stories are transmitted/submitted?? Eitherway, a good rule of thumb would be pronouns (he, she, it, you...) are never capitalized unless you are refering to God. Words like they, anyone, person etc. also are not capitalized unless it is the name of something like Persons for the Ethical Treatment of Vampires, for example. Only proper names really should ever be capitalized so you as Were Wolf would be where as Oz as a werewolf, would not be. Kiyah Street is capitolized but if Buffy is strolling down a street it is not, unless the name of that street happens to be Street. Hope that makes sense. Anyway, I hope you are able to continue your story and look forward to reading more in the future. Thanks again and stay safe out there!
Best regards,
Bids |
| Madsac |
jofy@yahoo.com |
2006-04-13 |
id # 3110 |
| Get a good night's sleep, stop drinking or taking the drugs. Then write in the morning and use a spellchecker. My head hurts. |
| Yep |
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2006-04-16 |
id # 3117 |
| Possibilities. |
| xander |
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2006-06-18 |
id # 3502 |
| love it |
| the first slayer |
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2006-06-18 |
id # 3503 |
| getting good |
| the first evil |
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2006-06-18 |
id # 3504 |
| super good |
| brittany |
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2006-06-18 |
id # 3505 |
| keep going |
| charmed ones |
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2006-06-18 |
id # 3506 |
| more chapters |
| the l word |
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2006-06-18 |
id # 3507 |
| more and more please |
| shane and carmen |
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2006-06-18 |
id # 3508 |
| love it so much |
| red |
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2006-06-22 |
id # 3613 |
I think it's amazing that you are under what you are under and write.
GOOD FOR YOU!
And nice story...waits for more. |
| C |
Butchcop@aol.com |
2006-07-04 |
id # 3723 |
| Kinda choppy but cool story so far..keep em coming.. |
| David |
Dagda06117032@yahoo.com |
2006-09-27 |
id # 4130 |
| Are you going to finish this one?? Like it alot |
| Cuprit |
2007-12-24 |
id # 6997 |
| Good update. I hope there is more to come soon. Good Job. |
| WERE WOLF |
2008-01-19 |
id # 7126 |
Can't wait for next Chapter
SHEWOLF |
| SHADOWCUB |
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2008-02-03 |
id # 7187 |
| Now it gets interesting. |
| Shadowcub |
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2008-02-28 |
id # 7267 |
| Lilith is really a pain in the ass. |
| birdie |
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2008-04-25 |
id # 7530 |
| ohhhh i cant wait for more :D |
| SHELLEY |
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2008-04-29 |
id # 7542 |
| just tuned in, loving this fic. keep it up xx |
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