Reviews for A snippet from Hell Rin 2008-04-20 id # 7500 Of course you should post!! Share the wealth!! That was...graphic! Great job! Anon 2008-04-21 id # 7505 Wow. That was... intense. You say it's a snippet you weren't going to post, but I'm glad you did. What's more, I'd like to read the whole backstory behind it. It's implied that Willow is the matriarch of this little family and it'd be very interesting to see just how she assembled it. zingrrrl 2008-04-23 id # 7517 That was certainly graphic. And there is a lot here to build a great story, but right now you have little more here than violence porn. You need to frame it with a story. Something that gives the open brutality some contrast and a reason for being. What motivates them to do what they're doing? That they're looking for Angelus isn't enough. Why do they have to find him? What are the consequences for finding him? For not finding him? Why is Faith so unwilling to tell them where he is? Does she really know, or is it an excuse to torture and rape her? Even if you have no plans to further this piece, giving everyone involved some clearly defined motivations would go a long way to shaping this up into a story and giving the brutality some much needed context. Don't get me wrong, I'm all for the gratuitous violence. My fics are full of it. And one of my all time favorite fics features Spike raping Buffy and the consequences of that, so I have no problem with you going there with Spike and Faith. But some context and motivation could really make this a very strong piece. And if you ever decide to expand it, add consequences as well. You definitely show a knack for achieving a real visceral reaction here. This isn't bad, in fact it's good for what it is. But it has the potential to be more, it just needs some polish. emily