Re: Fic: Convergent Slayers (8/?) -- feedback

["C S Armitage" <soren_nyrond@xxxxxxxxxxx>]

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Date: Thu, 15 Feb 2001 13:21:17 -0000
From: ladyvyxen@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
Subject: Fic: Convergent Slayers (8/?)

> Anne-Lise blinked. "Fudgy-choco-fic?"

And what else would you call it -- it's finest-kind literary-cuisine, 
served up in a luxurious coating of chocolatey slashiness

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> He'd even hired Cordelia, and there couldn't possibly 
> be any greater act of masochism. 


> "From the fading day," he wrote, "on the winter's wind, she came 
> back to me on singed and tattered wings, seeking a warming light to 
> dance within. She yearned for heat yet feared my flame. She'd known 
> such pain; her heart had lived in outer darkness, locked in ice, 
> hating and needing, longing for surrender. But she sensed, somehow, 
> my light would never burn her. I was not the fiery sun of August full 
> of raging heat and withered souls, but the warmth of early summer; 
> loving, comforting, passion without cruelty, full of the wholeness of 
> life. And to this warmth she came before the dying of her wings."

Whimper. 
You've caught the "purple prose" school of gothic perfectly.

*

> "Five by five," Cordelia completed as she entered. "Faith's raising 
>an army and she's on her way here."

I also have to admire your seamless assembly of the entire gang within 
about eighteen lines, without it seeming forced.


> "This is a covert anti-ballistic vest," Xander explained. "It takes 
> type 3A plates which can stop pretty much anything up to a 7.62 
> millimetre sniper round." Xander seemed lost in his own little world.

Could I have one for Christmas, please ?


Coulf I also beg for another episode please ? Soon ?

Soren, Nyrond, Lurker & fan