Re: ::Feedback:: Fic: The Vamp Trap (1/?)

[angelina2006@xxxxxxxxxxx]

--- In buffywantswillow@y..., cilia@m... wrote:
> Feedback...
> 
> Sticking to my new philosophy, you see I told you this would come 
> back to bite me, I'm going to try and give an honest and detailed 
> feedback. 

This chilled me to my very bones when I first read it. "Oh great, I'm 
the first victim" came to mind <g>

> As a comedy piece this works quite well,

Phew.

> still the beginning left me 
> wondering just what the hell was going on. If I hadn't read the 
> actual challenge I might have found myself a bit lost at the start. 
> Though this clears up quickly as the story kicks into gear.

Yeah, I did wonder about the beginning. But I thought if people had 
seen the ep they would probably get that I was trying to establish 
how Cordy's wish had been made in my twisted little universe. 
Reading the original challenge is also useful, I should probably have 
re-iterated the conditions of the challenge first. 

> 
> The scenes with Vamp Willow are played out nicely, she comes of 
very 
> Drusilla like, but with that naughty behavior that defines her 
> persona. The scene were Buffy has to forcefully remove her hand 
from 
> a place that shall go unmentioned and the whole interaction between 
> her and Angel is excellent writing.

Thanking you kindly.

> As for the relationships: They seem well established at the start 
of 
> the story, but although I'm still slightly confused about the 
status 
> of the B/W and an explanation about how the Faith/Cordelia pairing 
> came about would be appreciated, but it is by no means necessary. 

Right, I'm not very great at establishing relationships so I like to 
start things working on the assumption that the couples just got 
together at some point in the past. However, that said, I'm about to 
post a short fic which follows on from My Slayer Lady which was the 
start of F/C's relationship (I'm thinking that this fic could follow 
on from that one, and Girls Interrupted which was the first one I 
wrote in a similar vein) The fic I'm going to post is called The 
Morning After and should clear up how Faith and Cordelia decided to 
give it a go.

> 
> Well that's it,

Well, that wasn't as bad as I thought it would be <g>

Thanks
Angelina