Re: Fic; Return (6/10)

[Mad-Hamlet@xxxxxxx]

Greetings,
Y'know, I'm willing to wager that just as you were writing those last 
lines, you had this huge grin on your face.
High pitched animal like giggles occasionally snuck past this rictus 
on your face and your hands trembled just a bit.
Perhaps you even occasionally muttered something along the lines of
'Hee hee hee..they're going to kill me!'

But you figured it would be a worthwhile death.
And you're right. It will be.

Okay. By the numbers.

Spike's 'Moment'. Classic. Dead on and worth reading three times over 
just to get a repeat of that buzz from a perfect 'Spike Instant'.
SO..you're all good there.

A nice touch using a switch from 'nobility' to total bonkers in 
phrasing Riley's motives too. Yings the brain around nicely.

The final scene was quite well done. TOO well done. Many people here 
probably wanted to see Willow just go SPARE on Riley's ass but she 
didn't. YOU didn't. Because Willow, at her core, is very forgiving. 
And you realised that and allowed her, or wrote her, to be what she 
is. So she tried to reach out, sorta..pull Riley away. Good for her. 
Bad for us Vengence Savoring, bloodthirst,
KKkkkaaaniggets...but..accurate to a fault in terms of Willow 
charaterization. 
So...good.

Dr. 'I LIKE SPRIZKER AND BEER's ending was good two. 'Pleased to meet 
you, hope you get my name' *CRACK*.
Wow...Glory actually left a world a better place. Briefly.

Generally thougth, I'd make it a point to have a spyhole in your door, 
cause people are gonna come knockin' after reading this...you better 
be prepared.
(I recomend kevlar body armour personally.)

To sum up.
Good work.
You're in deep shit, but Excellent work in getting there.
Let's see you, and the gang, get out.

I remain, as always,
Mad-Hamlet