Re: [Fic: Enigma (1/?)]

[Mad Hamlet <Mad-Hamlet@xxxxxxx>]

Greetings,


*Public Sub CreateFic(Optional ByVal strIdea As String)
* Dim objFic As clsFic
* If objAnneLise.Feedback = 0 Then
* ' Note To Self: Pout.
* Exit Sub
* End If
* Select Case lngBoredom
* Case 0:
* Set objFic = objAnneLise.NewFic
* objFic.Seed strIdea
* objFic.PostAddition
* Set objFic = Nothing
* Case Else:
* objAnneLise.PostAnotherSnippet strIdea
* End Select
* Msgbox("Need more feedback!"), , "BuffyWantsWillow"
*End Sub

I've been using computers too long. The sad fact is that I almost understood
all that and I've tried really, really hard not to ever pick up computer code.
Even bombed serveral college courses in search of my goal.
*Sigh*



* "Willow!" The Slayer squealed and launched herself at her lover. 
*They clung together for a joyous moment. "Oh, Willow!" Buffy said in 
*earnest. "I want to make love to you!" Buffy grinned widely.
* Willow giggled as she scanned the smirking faces of the WAIT 
*members. Xander's grin was unmistakable, but even so she covered 
*Buffy's lips with her own and explored with her tongue frantically.
* "Sure, love," she whispered when they parted for breath. "Let's go 
*back to your place."

Ooooohhhkkaayyy.. I'll just file this under 'Tact-How Not to Have It.' And
enjoy this big ol's SEG on my face. 



* She grabbed a few of the Carbon 60 shards from the floor below the 
*hole and packed them in her wetsac. She started to swim upwards, her 
*hands moving to her buoyancy compensator, when a hand reached out 
*from the murk and tore out her heart.

I liked this bit. It's how good story is written. Just enough detail and
information to give the player a bit of character. We know she works for the
Govt. Her name, is an expierienced diver and probably a physist. Or some
varient in that field. 
We also know, through a short, violent, brutal and GOOD closing scene, that
she's now a corpse.

But I have to ask. Why is it always the heart? Why not..say..the liver? It's
just as fatal, probably makes a delighfully squishy sound when crushed and is
a lot bigger. There's the added bonus of the 'Not quite so instant' death
which lets whatever Hellish Boogity boo that done the deed enjoy a few seconds
of death throes. Those are always fun to watch.


* Willow's moaning grew louder. She lowered her mouth to Buffy's 
*breast and sucked it gently erect. Buffy's hands roamed her back as 
*she moved to the other, then she slipped a little as Buffy manoeuvred 
*her onto her side, arranging their thighs so that they could ride 
*each other gently as they kissed.
* Willow's need became readily apparent, and the Slayer willingly 
*moved her hands to Willow's netherlips to provide the release her 
*lover so readily accepted. 

And now I'm having flashbacks to nearly every other thing you've ever written.
This is a 'GOOD' Thing. 
So are the flashbacks.
Course all the instances of activity seem to have little..or anything..in
connection with each other.(Except Buffy and Willow, they seem to be connected
REAL good.) but I'm confidant you'll manage to tie everything together nicely.
And, if we're lucky, the tying together of events will also involve the tying
up of specific blondes and redheads.

I'm just kidding.
(ID: NO HE ISN'T!!)

Sheesh, that guys a dead giveaway every time.

I remain, as always,
Mad-Hamlet



Do not cross a storyteller.
A storyteller is, perhaps, the most powerful thing in all of creation.
At their beck and call they have the powers of What Might be, What Could Be,
What Should Be and What Will Be.
All anyone else has is What Is. 
All the pontential versus mere reality. 


-Mad-Hamlet