Re: FF: Shadows of Desire

["the_gremlin28" <the_gremlin28@xxxxxxxxx>]

--- In buffywantswillow@y..., danspector@w... wrote:
> From archivist and betareader to author, a very nice first effort, 
DG!

Yeah I get bored and a bored gremlin is never good. Just ask Aeris.
> 
> Strong plotting work, with the details on the demons and the 
artifact,
> and nice characterization of Willow drifting off over an
> eternally-clueless Buffy and Giles properly reproaching his reckless
> slayer. (Nice high school days feel on that, at that).
> 
> Just a question, a criticism, and a quibble.
> 
> Question: when is this set? We've got the Magic Box, so it's 
either 5
> or 6, but Willow is apparently living with Buffy, but not Tara, so
> that's post-"Tabula Rasa", but Giles is there. Are we present-day, 
with
> Giles added in? I just ask because the characters have been 
through a
> lot lately and while I don't expect references to actual events, 
just
> knowing where we are helps me understand their actions and emotions.

As far as when this happens in the story line....well it doesn't 
really...I mean the people and places are just kind of there.

> 
> Criticism: Villains who actually go "Muhahaha" while kidnapping the
> damsel-in-distress are a little too cliched, I'm afraid
> 
Yeah I know but it just got there anyway...I don't really know 
how....honest...<puts on stolen halo> really


> Quibble: regarding geography, Sunnydale is on the California coast,
> about where Santa Barbara is, Joss says. Go southwest from there 
and
> you just get a lot of ocean.
> 
A far as the east west thing. I'm in New York most everything is 
west. and I never was good at geography either. So think of it east.


> But, all in all, a lot of fun and I look forward to more.
> 
> Dan

Darn that means I have to continue? ok fine you asked for it. 

Ps. Aeris you can put down the whip, ok? I see what I can do. Slave 
driver!!! :-p