Re: FIC: There's Not Enough "Ew!" In The World [1/?] **NC-17** (see note)

["blinviz" <debvii@xxxxxxxxx>]

--- In buffywantswillow@y..., danspector@w... wrote:
> 

Hey! I was gonna quote passages, but apparently your text is all an 
attachment or something. :sigh: Ah, well, I'll work without quotes.

1. Wow! Way to get your reader inside the character's head and feel 
what she's feeling. That dream squicked me, and I felt bad with/for 
Buffy. Nice, Buffyesque touch with the Snyde Man and his studded 
collar. :chuckle:&:shudder:

2. At first I didn't believe that Buffy would mistake Tara for Willow, 
but upon rereading it worked. I think my eyes might have still had 
crust in them during the first reading, but I thought I'd mention it 
anyway.

3. Liked Tara's kinda-insight about sabotaging Buffy, and her reaction 
(feeling ill) also rang true. I felt like I was hearing just a 
leeeeetle bit too much of the author in that thought about "just under 
a year ago". Is there a way you could smooth that out a bit?

4. I wondered whether Buffy wouldn't be a bit more, I dunno, 
apologetic to Tara. Or maybe she was just too disoriented to say 
anything?

5. Willy the Snitch?! My god, man, now you've gone too far!

6. Please don't leave us hanging. This was good stuff. Can't wait to 
see what Buffy does now, how Tara handles this (if at all), and I wish 
Will would get her butt home from class soon. :)