Re: FF: Love Immortal 5/7

["David A. Knapton" <belgin_tei@xxxxxxxxxxx>]

--- In buffywantswillow@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx, danspector@w... wrote:
> David,
> 
> Great stuff! (I've been waiting for someone to pick up on the 
subtext
> in Cordy's line from "Passion"! "Two's company, three's...not", 
indeed!
> Wonder which one she's jealous of... <g>) I loved Joyce 
thinking "Time
> for denial!" and I don't know how Buffy kept from kissing Willow 
in the
> bedroom. (Okay, I do know--it's because you're evil.)

I'm not the only one I can think of quite a few writers that have 
done it before me.

> More importantly, I dig how you let the changes you've to Joyce and
> Jenny's pasts inform the characters as we know them. The 
Angelus/Joyce
> scene plays so differently with Joyce knowing who and what he is.  
And
> good flashback with Jenna in Borsa a century ago.

Yes with Joyce knowing about Angel I think that part worked out well 
although it did take some time to come up with a reasonable dialogue.
 
> Also, liked the bit with Giles picking up Joyce's groceries, and 
the
> restoration of the cut line about Grandma...

Yeah as I was writing the part where Giles comes to the door, it 
struck me that in the show even though it was obviously only minutes 
after Joyce had gone in side the food had disappeared? So I though I 
explain it.
 
> More!  
> 
> Dan

I've almost finished part 6 (it surprised me too!) I just got about 
a half page to add to flesh it out then my beta will get it around 
monday/tuesday so expect it by next weekend at the latest.

Brightest Blessings

Dave