RE: Life is Short (revamped) Part 6b/7

["TheBear" <thebear@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Thanks! I'm pleased that you are enjoying the story! Thanks for your
input on Dan's comments. Always good to have another opinion!



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From: buffnwill@xxxxxxxx [mailto:buffnwill@xxxxxxxx] 
Sent: Wednesday, July 23, 2003 2:21 AM
To: buffywantswillow@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Subject: Re: Life is Short (revamped) Part 6b/7



First let me say how much I've been enjoying this revamped version -
particularly all of Buffy's thoughts about Willow - and anxiously await
the conclusion. I've always thought that Buffy was smitten at the water
fountain that first day (as was Willow) and this fic illustrates that as
well as any I've ever read.



Now to Dan's points. I do agree that the confession from Cordy (and her
sheep) was a bit too easy but as to the physical evidence, I don't
really see Flutie as being convinced that Buffy put her fist through a
concrete block wall, no matter what Cordelia and her followers say.
Outside of that, there really wasn't any other physical evidence. I also
thought you did alright with Flutie's character. Even Snyder backed down
from Giles and I can certainly see Flutie capitulating much quicker than
Snyder ever would.



Keep up the great work.



On Tue, 22 Jul 2003 23:34:31 -0700 (PDT) danspector@xxxxxxxxx writes:

Bear,

While I love getting to see Xander get to wear a wire, I'm having a
little trouble here. Did not Buffy actually threaten Cordy (if not with
death, than with a severe thrashing) back in that bathroom scene? The
physical evidence of her violent behavior is there to be seen-I don't
know that the Cordettes' statements would be the only reason Flutie had
for suspending Buffy. Also, I tend to think that Cordelia (who is in
fact quite bright and usually got the upper hand in her verbal jousts
with Xander) would see through his attempt to get them to incriminate
themselves. Indeed, wouldn't it make more sense that Cordy had drilled
the Cordettes about sticking to the story, and wouldn't blithely admit
her "guilt" the moment the subject came up? Seems like a too-convenient
way to dispose of this plot, IMO. (I also thought Flutie was badly
characterized in this chapter.)

Lastly, Willow and Xander seemed to have forgotten all about Jesse. A
simple mention that one reason they want to clear Buffy is so that Buffy
can find Jesse would have gone a long way, I think.

Still liking the fic, but this part doesn't really seem to fit with the
realistic, angsty part 6a. It seems more like a quick wrapup so we can
get to the screwing. Not that I'm against the screwing, but I'm sorry
to see the issues you raised dropped so quickly.

Looking forward to the fic going out with a bang ;)

Dan




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