First let me say how much I've been enjoying this revamped version - particularly all of Buffy's thoughts about Willow - and anxiously await the conclusion. I've always thought that Buffy was smitten at the water fountain that first day (as was Willow) and this fic illustrates that as well as any I've ever read. Now to Dan's points. I do agree that the confession from Cordy (and her sheep) was a bit too easy but as to the physical evidence, I don't really see Flutie as being convinced that Buffy put her fist through a concrete block wall, no matter what Cordelia and her followers say. Outside of that, there really wasn't any other physical evidence. I also thought you did alright with Flutie's character. Even Snyder backed down from Giles and I can certainly see Flutie capitulating much quicker than Snyder ever would. Keep up the great work. On Tue, 22 Jul 2003 23:34:31 -0700 (PDT) danspector@xxxxxxxxx writes: Bear, While I love getting to see Xander get to wear a wire, I'm having a little trouble here. Did not Buffy actually threaten Cordy (if not with death, than with a severe thrashing) back in that bathroom scene? The physical evidence of her violent behavior is there to be seen?I don't know that the Cordettes' statements would be the only reason Flutie had for suspending Buffy. Also, I tend to think that Cordelia (who is in fact quite bright and usually got the upper hand in her verbal jousts with Xander) would see through his attempt to get them to incriminate themselves. Indeed, wouldn't it make more sense that Cordy had drilled the Cordettes about sticking to the story, and wouldn't blithely admit her "guilt" the moment the subject came up? Seems like a too-convenient way to dispose of this plot, IMO. (I also thought Flutie was badly characterized in this chapter.) Lastly, Willow and Xander seemed to have forgotten all about Jesse. A simple mention that one reason they want to clear Buffy is so that Buffy can find Jesse would have gone a long way, I think. Still liking the fic, but this part doesn't really seem to fit with the realistic, angsty part 6a. It seems more like a quick wrapup so we can get to the screwing. Not that I'm against the screwing, but I'm sorry to see the issues you raised dropped so quickly. Looking forward to the fic going out with a bang ;) Dan Yahoo! Groups Sponsor ADVERTISEMENT Willow: "It's a good fight, Buffy, and I want in." Buffy: "I kinda love you." --'Choices' Community email addresses: Post message: buffywantswillow@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Subscribe: buffywantswillow-subscribe@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Unsubscribe: buffywantswillow-unsubscribe@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx List owner: buffywantswillow-owner@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Shortcut URL to this page: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/buffywantswillow Official archive for the list: http://www.ikoly.com/fanfic Other links to Buffy/Willow fics: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/buffywantswillow/links Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to the Yahoo! Terms of Service.
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