Re: Redhead or redhead or Red Head or....

["weryvcb" <weryvcb@xxxxxxxxx>]

Lol, you have a good point, it is hard. But I refuse to give up; 
there has to be a better way. I mean, does it really sound better to 
say "Buffy ran her finger down the side of Willow's face. Buffy 
heard the hacker gasp..."? It's just so jarring. First of all, some 
of those sentences could be combined so it would be more "Buffy ran 
he finger down the side of Willow's face, hearing her gasp in her 
arms. She couldn't believe how soft her lips were.." One could stick 
to a certain point of view or do first person. Or maybe this is just 
a personal annoyance. Do you agree that having to resort to redhead 
or slayer makes for awkward writing? 


--- In buffywantswillow@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx, "ivygort" <ivygort@e...> 
wrote:
> Got any ideas then besides saying Willow and Buffy 5000 times in 
fic?
> I mean let's see:
>
> Buffy ran her finger down the side of Willow's face.  Buffy heard 
Willow
> gasp at the contact and it encouraged her to take Willow into her 
arms.
> Buffy couldn't believe how soft Willow;s lips were as she moaned.
>
> See writing slash is harder than writing f/m.
>
> Xander ran his fingers down the side of Willow's face.  He heard 
her gasp at
> the contact and it encouraged him to take her into his arms.  He 
couldn't
> believe how soft her lips were as she moaned....
>
> So if you have some ideas then I'm open cause I'm writing a future 
fic and
> hacker, witch, blah, blah don't work.
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "weryvcb" <weryvcb@y...>
> To: <buffywantswillow@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
> Sent: Sunday, November 16, 2003 7:52 PM
> Subject: ~Buffy*Wants*Willow~ Re: Redhead or redhead or Red Head 
or....
> I think that it's generally frowned upon in writing to refer to a
> character as a redhead (which, btw, I think it the correct version)
> or blonde haired girl or whatever if the hair color is already 
known
> and is not pertinent to the story.



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