Re: FIC: For You, I Will Wait (1/?) B/W PG I think

[Dutch <dutchpizza@xxxxxxxxx>]

I like the story being told and that Willow doesn't just decide that night to leave Oz. That doesn't happen very often so it's a nifty thing. And I love a slow build up in a fic and that looks to be what you're going for. So, while waiting for more, I thought I'd also mention that you change between present tense, past tense, and future tense all through paragraphs and even some sentences get 2 different tenses. So, get those all fixed up and it's off to a great start; oh, and I read your reply to Dan, that English isn't your main language, so a beta reader or something like that could help out a lot probably.

 

Hope you didn't mind me pointing that out,

Dutch

desdemona03 <ingin_tahu2001@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:

Title: For You, I Will Wait

Chapter: 1

Author: Desdemona / photographer

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