Re: [Dark Alliance 4a maybe]

[Mad Hamlet <Mad-Hamlet@xxxxxxx>]

Greetings,

> > I've never written much Xander before and I'm not certain that the 
way I've written him is believable.  So this is just a trial 
depending on the FB I get.  If anyone does not find this 
characterization believable I would love to hear from you.

Before I get into this overly much let me be absolutlyt crystal clear about a
number of things.

1. I like this story.

2. This is just my opinion which means it should have no more weight upon your
mind then the memory of last weeks lunch on Wensday.

Is it believeable? 

Yes. 

Is it effortlessly believeable?

No.

But it is not just because of Xander it's the whole deal. I've been reading
this very quietly for a while now and it's good. Good enough that I keep my
eyes open for it but there is a trend forming that has had me muttering a bit.


The overall gist of this tale is that Buffy is 'Better'. Better clear across
the board, particularly in understanding who she is and what what she is and
how it affects both the who and the what that make her Buffy. (That sentence
actually makes sense if you read it slowly and out loud)

And we've been told, via the story, in a reasonably well enough way(Though I
think it could have been fleshed out a LITTLE better) how this Buffy became
'better'. 

That's all great.

The snag is this 'better' affect seems to be not only affecting Buffy but
Willow and Xander as well. I had a bit of trouble with Xander being that
articulate during the dinner. His first efforts of apology were believealbe as
he had rehersed them but the second took a bit of effort on my part. Joyce's
careful intervention though did help it quite a bit; I think Xander's attempt
at humor though might have been earlier and perhaps a little more prevelent.

Willow's little speech really caught me off guard.

I guess the logic behind your efforts might be 'Willow has found her true love
and this lends her stability; she's no longer searching she has 'found
herself'. Fine. 

Trouble is that even people who are perfectly okay, and have been for a long
time, then realise they're gay, then find their 'perfect partner' and are
quite happy still have a habit of pinwheeling like crazy when the assults
begin. Those attacks by people who are in it for the cruelty, the ignorance or
the fun can be viscious enough to knock even a well rounded, solid person off
their feet. Someone like Willow, even with Buffy beside her, would have real
problems. 

Then again, what the hell do I know? 

My Xander attemps have always been a shade off from miserable failures.

Oh, and one last note: Love the insturment analogy despite the whole
Willow-snag. However I don't think 'blowing a trumpet' is the best
instrument-sexual/orientation-innduendo for a heterosexual male. Might make
Larry perk up and take notice though.

I remain, as always,
Mad-Hamlet


A requirement that literature or art conform to some norm prescribed by an
official smacks of an ideology foreign to our system.
                      William O. Douglas
                      Supreme Court Justice



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